I stretched my hand to the back and curled up my long, straight fingers. I placed all my anger in this very bullet in the gun. I lifted it up and pointed it towards him. He, Jake, had done so many things which made me feel a gleam of betrayal. I believed him like how I did others, but he betrayed me. He betrayed my friendship. My hands trembled at the thought of using the gun on him. I have never thought of using this gun on him, not even once even at the brink of death.
Fate was what I would let decide if he lives or dies. Once an animal comes, I would shoot him with no worries. After all, this place was deep in the forest. No one would come, no one would ever find us. However, Fate played with me. I landed in trouble because I believed in Fate. Again, I felt betrayed. Nobody knew how I felt.
“Freeze!” The door was being kicked open by a strong leg. A police officer was standing there with his gun pointing towards me. He ordered me to put my gun down and walk up to him. He even promised me that I would not be punished. I gullibly believed him and walked up to him with my gun facing downwards when he snapped the handcuffs over my wrists. Again, I was betrayed.
When we were in the police station, where I was currently sitting in, they tried to make me believe them again when all the trust I had was gone. I was used to being betrayed but what hurt me the most was tha tmy best friend, whom I share my every secret with, had betrayed me and wanted me dead.
“Why did you try to kill Jake?”
I did not only tried to kill Jake, I even tried to believe him again and again and I could no longer take it. It was only this time that I took actions to defend myself because he betrayed me over and over again and this was the final straw. I will now tell you why I resorted to pointing a gun at him and almost killing him…
It was a week ago when we robbed the bank. The bank owner was Mr Thomas S. Jason, my best friend’s uncle. When we robbed his bank, Jake felt guilty and backed out. He tried to fire the alarm and I saw what had happened. I stopped him immediately and oly gave him a lecture when we got to our hideout.
“What were you trying to do just now?”
It was through the threatening and forcing before he told me that his uncle knew that we were going to rob the bank and had alreayd notified the policemen about it.
“How did he find out?”
He only revealed to me the truth when I found out that he was lying. I could tell because I read somewhere before that when a person is telling the truth, his eyes would shift to the left but if he lies, his eyes would shift rightwards.
His uncle used to be a thief in the past when he was around twenty odd. However, he betrayed his gang leader and manged to get out of the big trouble even before it brewed.
This time, he said he also wanted to be like his uncle. He had learnt how to betray. At that point of time, I became so emotional. I could not believe that he would rather betray me and give up the money for kinship.
In the end, I could only come to the conclusion that he was mentally-ill but an even bigger surprise came when he said that he was a cop. I felt trememdously betrayed by my very close friend.
Now, I do not hold any form of trust anymore. I will never allow myself to be cheated and betrayed ever again.
Word count: 659
The plot brings across the meaning of ‘betrayal’ very well! Besides being betrayed by his close friend, the protagonist was also being betrayed by the police and in a way, Fate, as well.
Even though Shu Ping does not use any bombastic vocabulary, there are good expressions every now and then to add colour to her piece of writing.
The conclusion is powerful, stating how this betrayal by a close friend has an impact so huge that it prevents the protagonist from trusting anyone so readily in the future.
Good job, Shu Ping!
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